So, you’re not in the mood for laughter today? Then pull up a chair, set a box of tissues on the table, and get ready to have your heart strangled and torn into tiny pieces, as you read this poem based on my short story, “A Box of Moonpies”. The story is almost 4000 words long, so you’re not likely to see it on my blog. If you’d like to read it, let me know. If there’s enough interest, I’ll post it.
She Sat Alone
She sat by the bed, gently holding his hand
Her other hand covered red eyes
Choking back tears, she muffled great sobs
With heart heaving, soul wrenching sighs
Don’t leave me she thought, and tried not to show
The fear that played in brown eyes
Smiling, she joked ‘bout things they had done
Her laughter and smiles were but lies
She placed a small finger upon his dry lips
Said, I love you, you dear gentle man
He smiled with his eyes, said, yes love I know
With a sweet gentle squeeze of his hand
The time was too short for this sad last goodbye
For too long these two were in love
No fairness your leaving, was all she could think
Of this man she’d not had enough of
How could you, she asked, go and leave me alone
His hand slipped from hers as he died
Yet, she knew from her heart, he never would go
She sat alone and softly she cried
Copyright © 1998 C. Mashburn
Sherry Mashburn said
Beautiful, Charlie
charlesmashburn said
Aw, shucks…
antomaniax said
Very nice poem!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you!
genebrother said
Thinking of a time when this would be mine
I understand the sadness of your state of mind.
Time will move your thought of sadness to another
realm and you will come back, now and then…
only now and then.
Thanks for sharing you poetry.
Genebrother
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, Genebrother. Appreciate the visit and comments!
terri0729 said
I didn’t plan on crying today! But I did. Mark said the he dreamed one night that we went together and I told him that I was going to hold him too it 🙂 I think this is the biggest fear for those of us who love another so deeply and we cannot think of life without them. As a matter of fact, I stay far away from it. Very nicely done! Blessings on you and yours…
charlesmashburn said
I don’t fear it, Terri, but I don’t like the idea. I’m like you, though, I just stay away from those thoughts. I am so happy with my life and y wonderful wife that I try to concentrate on living life to its fullest with her every day. Tomorrow will get here soon enough. Thanks for the visit and comments, and thanks, also for subscribing to my blog. I think you will enjoy it!
Mihir Vatsa said
Why do they have to die all the time! I don’t like this. Nice poem though.
charlesmashburn said
It is sad that dying is so much a part of life. I’m glad you liked the poem!
Derek said
It’s amazing that you can put yourself in the perspective to write this. Beautiful and emotional. Two thumbs up.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, Derek! It’s amazing, even to me. I don’t know how I do it, it just seems to besomething I can do. I am able to write from almost any perspective, and it takes no preparation. I just say, okay, here’s the situation, and I write it. It often feels like I’m an actor in a role. I appreciate your visit and comments!
charlesmashburn said
It amazes me, too, Derek. I sometimes feel I’m an actor, stepping into a role. I simply imagine what a person must feel a t a given time, and I write it.
Thanks for the visit and comments!
Becky said
Pass those tissue, please.
Great poem. 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Sorrieee!
Thanks for reading and commenting!
Abby Kelly said
Goodness – that’s SAD, but so terribly happy at the same time for those who love Jesus. I just lost my grandfather a couple months ago and I could see my grandmother in those words. I am so proud of her and her hope in Christ, for she sees each day as His continued purpose for her.
http://www.benjity.wordpress.com
charlesmashburn said
You are so right, Abby. In the story, the woman’s name is Ruby, and she eipitomizes every strong and brave woman I have ever known. Yes, she cries at the loss of her dear huband, but she will go on.
Thanks for the visit and wonderful comments!
CC Champagne said
Not crying, but I did find myself holding my breath waiting for the end… I kind of feel like a voyeur. *shudders* I like when words evoke thoughts and deep feelings and this you most certainly achieved! Beautiful, Charles! Beautiful!
charlesmashburn said
Thanks a bunch, CC! I consider this high praise comeing from you!
Poetry & Icecream said
So sad and unfortunately part of life. You’ve captured that moment so well and I can only imagine how lonely it would feel when your lifelong partner leaves before you. Well done!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the visit and thought-filled comments. I appreciate them!
duncancleary said
Excellent cadence, nicely done. May we all have a hand to hold when the time comes.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, Duncan! Your vist and comments are aprreciated!
acoustic3 said
Wasn’t prepared for that amount of sadness.
Waaaahhhh.
Beautiful.
charlesmashburn said
Well, I warned ya!
Thanks for the visit and comments!
Kim Nelson said
Charles~
You’re timing, or perhaps mine, is uncanny.
I spent the morning with one of my closest friends, for the first time since her husband died only 5 weeks post diagnosis. Uncanny.
This poem speaks directly to the heart of the matter.
charlesmashburn said
I’m sorry to hear of your friends husband’s passing.
I hope the poem is in some way helpful. In the story, the woman’s name is Ruby, and she is very courageous.
Thanks for the visit and coments!
Umesh Rao said
Beautifully depicted the sad moment of saying good bye..
She sat alone yet he was with her treasured deeply in her heart.
Thanks for sharing,
charlesmashburn said
That was the point, Umesh. He was gone in body, but never gone from her heart.
Thank you for the visit and thought-filled comments!
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charlesmashburn said
I visited your blog and read a lot of your poems. They are all quite good! You have a way of telling your varied stories in a down-to-earth manner, which really appeals to my taste.
Thanks for leaving the links, and thanks for reading and commenting on my poem!
ashbeezone said
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charlesmashburn said
I just might do that as soon as I get caught up! Getting so many responses, I’m falling behind on my writing. But, hey! I’m not complaining!
Elyas Mulu Kiros said
This is a beautiful work, Charles! i really like it. Thank you for sharing! You have captured that particular emotion quite well.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, Elyas! I truly appreciate your wonderful comments!
becca givens said
Then pull up a chair, set a box of tissues on the table, and get ready to have your heart strangled and torn into tiny pieces, as you read this poem based on my short story, “A Box of Moonpies”.
You were not kidding! maawah … sniff sniff! 😦 This brought me right back to the moment my dad, my rock, my first love passed away a couple of years ago … you captured it well. I would be interested in reading “A Box of Moonpies”!! Beautifully written!!
charlesmashburn said
Aw, thanks Becca! I’d say I’m sorry I made you cry, but like I tell Sherry when she reads one like this, “That’s my job!”
I need to reconstruct “A Box of Moonpies”, and will do so–maybe this morning–and get it posted. I reclaimed it from an old format, and it is currently a “word” mess.
Thanks so much for another great visit and comments. Always a pleasure to have you come around!
Anna Montgomery said
Yes, this is why I always tell my husband he has to let me die first (don’t think he’ll listen though) – sorry my poem made your head go ’round, hope it’s still securely attached. Well said.
charlesmashburn said
Anna! You make my old head explode with them big words! My goodness, girl, you must wear out thesauruses quickly. I say that in jest, because I know you probably have all those words in your head! Me, I say ain’t, y’all, whup and I’m fixin to. ( As in, “I’m a fixin to whup up a batch of griddle cakes, y’all. I ain’t lyin’.”) Thesaurus is a big word to me, and when I open one, it might as well be written in French!
Anywho, thanks for the visit and comments!
Anna Montgomery said
A friend helped me revise my poem so it may be better now, less neurologically damaging at least. It’s still chock o’block with them big words but heavens I love them. I have fond memories of living in North Carolina and being teased for my diction. I never could get the hang of double negatives or dropping the g off words like swimmin’. I did however pick up the lovely Hey (pronouned Haaaaay in friendly greeting). Thanks for the hearty laugh and I’ll leave you with the giggle worthy fact that last week I posted a poem with 2,400+ words called Sesquipedalianism and Logophilia Engage in Logomachy ;)!
charlesmashburn said
OH-MY-GAWD <— (southern and politically correct spelling for God). I am utterly terrified by the title! That's akin to showing a cross to a vampire! I won't even let my eyes wander back to it! 2400 hundred words?Are there that many big words? Is it in English? I am literally trembling over here! I'll be dodging shadows all day… I… I…
Ina said
The most difficult goodbye, beautfully told here.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, Ina. I appreciate your visit and comment!
fiveloaf said
glad i came by charles.. nice! glad to be of acquaintance through thursday rally..
charlesmashburn said
Always good to meet new folks through these poetic gatherings!
Thanks for the visit and comments!
The Oldstrong said
Feels strange to find something so sad to be so beautiful.
As always your words are very elegant
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for visiting and leaving such wonderful comments! Much appreciated!
lucychili said
and it comes
this moment
sad and sweet
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for your comments!
eclipseofthemoon said
Well, that was a tough one to read… beautifully weaved words, describing an incredible sadness… Amazingly well captured feelings….Great work.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you so much for the great comments and compliments! They are very much appreciated!
Inside the Mind of Isadora said
Truly beautiful description of the emotions we feel for those we are losing. If anyone reads this and doesn’t treasure each moment with someone they love then they have not been touched. Shivers of fear moved through me. You captured how I would feel if I lost my sweet, dear hubby.
Exquisite writing, Charles,
Blessings,
Isadora
charlesmashburn said
I was reading and re-writing the story this morning, Isadora, and I got choked up when I got to the end. It gets to me every time. I will post it soon, but it is one that readers will need to print and read at their leisure.
Thanks for the wonderful comments!
The Noiseless Cuckooclock said
amazing departure piece…
you make sadness perfect in poetry.
Thanks for sharing.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you so much for these awesome comments. I appreciate them very much!
ALIVE aLwaYz said
but to let go one must!
nice piece, sobbing for lost love, an emotive expression.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks so much! I appreciate the visit and comments!
poetryroad said
sweet, sad and well written. loss ia always so emotional and your words did a wonderful job describing it.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks so much for the visit and comments. I appreciate them very much!
californiabean said
Wrenching – I’ve never been in the room when anyone has died, but I think this captures the moment in a perfect way
charlesmashburn said
I have never been in a situation such as this one either, thank God.
Your visit and comments are very much appreciated!
mairmusic said
Lovely– reminds me of my parents, sadly.
charlesmashburn said
So sorry to bring up a sad memory.
Thanks for the visit and comment.
johnewordslinger said
This is very heartfelt, Strength needed, thank you.. Much appreciated
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the nice comments, John. Much appreciated!
TheMsLvh said
Compelling. Grief is a tough one. Great and deeply thoughtfull poem.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you. Yes, it is a hard thing to live, and to write. This one was very emotional during the writing, and in re-writing the story yesterday, I got choked up a few times.
Thank you frot he wonderful comments!
Chimnese said
Omg u made me cry this is so sad.
charlesmashburn said
Then I did good, right? When my wife, Sherry, reads one of my poems or stories and it makes her cry, I tell her, “That’s my job!”
Thanks for the great comment!
deeju said
OH! you made my eyes wet, Charles…I read this poem, got stuck up with emotions, recollected my poor mom’s state during the loss of my dad.
charlesmashburn said
I’m sorry it brought up hard memories. It get’s to me when I read it, too.
Thanks for the visit and comments!
Iris D said
poignant and beautful farewell. Love never dies, it just changes. Great poem.
charlesmashburn said
Thnak you, Iris. I appreciate the visit and comments!
Just Sayin' said
Very touching. I feel for the one left behind. This was indeed from the heart of one who has felt a deep loss. My sincerest condolences
I would be honored if you looked at my submission for this week. It is a tribute to those who are no longer with us.
charlesmashburn said
Actually, this is a work of fiction. It is based on a short story I wrote just prior to the poem.
Thanks for the viit and comments!
I enjoyed your tribute to our soldiers.
Leonargo said
Death put so eloquently and nobly. Thank you.
charlesmashburn said
Thnak you for the visit and comments! Very much appreciated!
Kellie Elmore said
Bittersweet. Reminds me of the night we said goodbye to my grandma and how my uncle (the one who she raised and eventually cared for her in her old age) held her hand when she took her last breath. Thanks for sharing this with me. here is one I write about that moment…
http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2010/09/27/on-a-bed-of-winter/
charlesmashburn said
That must’ve been hard. You wrote beautifully about it.
You best go check out my Bluebell entry for theis week: Dearest John:
It’s a sequel to the one I put on your site last week, Dearest Wife:
Chimnese said
it was beautiful but yet so sad aswel…
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the visit and comments!
Caledoniapoems said
Beautiful x
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the visit and comment!
clariice said
Sad, I could sense the love and bond beneath the parting.
Thanks for sharing!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for reading and commenting!
Kay Salady said
Thank you, Charles, for a beautiful poem. This certainly brought back a memory.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the visit and comment, Kay. Very much appreciated!
wordcoaster said
I love your blog
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, david. I appreciate that!
magher1 said
So moving… Makes me curious about the story as a whole.
charlesmashburn said
I intend to post the story soon–maybe Sunday. It’s rather long, so not many will want to read it, but some have expressed an interest.
Thanks for the visit and comment!
ManicDdaily said
Yes, very sad but very well done. Sadness seeps through just from situation. Thanks. k.
charlesmashburn said
Yes’m. Thankfully, this one is totally fiction.
Thanks for reading and commenting, K!