Morning Mist

I’ve always thought the best poems were the ones that painted a scene of something witnessed; a lazy crescent moon, a beautiful sunset, a child playing. I wrote this one morning when we were living in a beautiful little community called Spicewood Beach on Lake Travis. Living out there was one of the best times of my life; this poem should give you an inkling why.

 Morning Mist

 

The trees stood eerily still

In a thin unmoving mist

A lone bird chirped slow and steady

The wind chimes made not a sound

 

In the yard across the way

A ceramic donkey posed

Ears erect and alert

Listening to morning’s approach

 

A cat, one of the neighbor’s herd

Padded softly across the street

The dog watched, eager to chase

But alas, the fence would not allow

 

She came to the chair where I sat

And offered her head for petting

I praised her and stroked cool fur

Then watched her bound happily away

 

Sudden sunlight slipped the misty veil

And the day all at once was there

A sip of coffee, then into my den

To pen what I had seen

 

Copyright © 2006 C. Mashburn

Sharing this with dVerse Poets Pub’s Open Link Night ~ Week 37

52 Comments »

  1. terri0729 said

    Sweetly serene, Charlie!! I really enjoyed it, thanks for sharing 🙂

  2. Sherry Mashburn said

    Those were wonderful mornings . . . sitting out on the front porch, sipping coffee and watching the neighborhood come awake.

  3. Kharma said

    Love this detailed description. Bet a picture could not have been better. Great words! Inspiring…..to escape work!

    • It is so rewarding to sit and enjoy something like this, then to be able to put into words what you observed!
      Thank you very much for visiting and commenting!

  4. Becky said

    Oh I love mornings like this.
    They make the whole day wonderful!

    • Yes! These are those moments when we truly stop and smell the roses!
      Thanks for the visit and comment, Becky!

  5. yelena said

    ..and you’ve painted a scene perfectly here..so soothing for the mind and heart your poem is. thank you for the mood 🙂

  6. a perfect display of laziness lol =) No, I love the laid back, lazy feel to it. You did a fine job!

  7. A moment, ordinary, noticed, observed, and woven beautifully into poetry. I enjoyed this!

  8. What a wonderful capture of a moment in time–Lovely write!

  9. Zouxzoux said

    I love a poem that takes me to the writer’s world and you’ve done that beautifully. I really enjoyed it!

  10. smiles…great capture of that early morning moment charles…it is serene to me and something that acts out in my life often…sweet little bit with the cat….many of which who love indiscriminantly…and maybe int aht there is something we can learn…smiles…

    • Thanks for the great comment, Brian. I always appreciate your visits and kind words!

  11. Isn’t that how it works sometimes. I’ve written many a poem note just like that. Very nice!!

  12. tashtoo said

    Would you mind if I sat with you for just a moment longer before you leave to pen your write? I have been in desperate need of just such a moment for so long now…simply a wonderful share, Charles! Thank you 🙂

    • I think we have to sieze those moments. Too many times, we don’t allow ourselves the time to appreciate the wonderful, ordinary things in our lives.
      Thanks for the visit and sweet comment!

  13. Like that idea of just immediately producing.

  14. Mary said

    It definitely is a wonderful feeling with something happens in front of your eyes that you KNOW is the stuff of poetry. I enjoyed your poetic reflections on the process!

  15. Paradise is just before dawn in the neighborhood with the animals and the lawns and the trees. What is sweeter? Well penned, sir.

    • You know it is, and nothing is sweeter! Thank you very much for the visit and comment, Gay!

  16. “Sudden sunlight slipped the misty veil

    And the day all at once was there”

    Charles, I’m a sucker for alliteration…and I really like the picture of the day arriving all at once. You captured this perfectly.

  17. Wander said

    I like your ability to tell a very clean and crisp story in a poem…very good write!

    Wander

  18. Emma said

    What a wonderful moment to travel to, Charles. You’ve offered such vivid, inviting details here…truly delightful to read.

  19. Shawna said

    “Sudden sunlight slipped the misty veil
    And the day all at once was there
    A sip of coffee, then into my den
    To pen what I had seen”

    The ending is really just the beginning.

    • So true, Shawna. I love it when that happens!
      Thank you very much for the visit and comment!

  20. Very nice, there must be something about morning mists eh! 🙂

    • There was a morning mist when I walked the dog this morning! How special is that?!?!
      Thanks for the visit and comment, Dianne!

  21. Very nice. I especially like the donkey’s erect ears! K.

    • Yes! The memory of that little attentive guy is sharp in my mind; we saw him every morning we sat on the front porch during those ten years. He’s moved since we left.

  22. Listening hard—k.

    (continuing.)

  23. Abby Kelly said

    I love this poem. I learn so much about being still watching my dog and cats!
    http://www.predatory-lies.com

    • I know! My dog is still way more than she’s moving! She’s old too, and I have to go look real close sometimes to make sure she’s breathing! I hate that!
      Thanks for the visit and comment, Abby!

  24. jove said

    I like the way you captured those moments in the morning that feel slow or still and then subtly bring us to that moment where the stillness turns to action.

    • Thank you very much, Jeanne! I’m glad you enjoyed it, and I appreciate your visit and comment!

  25. Hema said

    Aww..you unfurled the morning so beautifully! Nice poem!

  26. Tally said

    Wonderful how the little things can complete the perfect morning, well said:)

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