Ah, The Aroma!

Well! I Nevah! It seems a coup of sorts is afoot at dVerse Poets Pub this afternoon. Claudia has invited—big city dwellers only, it appears—to write something Poetic: Subway. Now, I ask you, what’s a good ol’ boy from Texas know about subways? Well, by gosh, we might just surprise you!

Ah, The Aroma!

For me, it all begins

When you open the door

The aroma assaults you

And the excited looks

Of all the other people

Let you know

This will be an experience

A ride, some would say

Like none other

You stroll along, watching

Making sure it’s all

Just the way you like it

And when you know it is

You give the guy

A token of your appreciation

In the way of

Five dollars

As advertised

Then grab a seat

And enjoy

A delicious

Foot long

Subway sandwich

Mmmm mmmm mm!

 

Copyright © 2012 C. Mashburn

66 Comments »

  1. claudia said

    haha…this is really cool charles…you can watch people at subway as good as on the subway ha…loved it

  2. aprille said

    Collapsed in laughter, yet again.
    Marvellous.

    • I’m glad you got a good laugh out of it, Aprille!
      Thanks for the visit and comment!

  3. Haha… well it was about a subway!

    • That’s what I’m talkin bout!!
      Thanks for the visit, laugh, and comment, Daydreamer!

  4. haha…spicy italian all the way for me please…lol…and for five dollars it can not be beat let me tell you…love there hot relish too…nice twist ont he prompt sir…

    • I knew you’d like this one, Brian. I coulda picked you as a spicy italian kinda guy, too!
      Thanks for the great comment!

  5. Mary said

    You have given me an idea. I love subway sandwiches. Haven’t been on the other kind of subway in a decade!

    • I love them, too, but Sherry isn’t that hip on ’em, so I don’t partaake too often.
      Thanks for the visit anc comment, Mary!

  6. Ha! Nice twist! Love it! Well done.

  7. Might be light but full of flavor, very tasty

  8. I like mine grilled chicken with lots of cheese…ha..ha… ~

    • mmmmmmm… griiiiilled chiiiickeeeen & loooooots of cheeeeessse
      OH! Dang! Kinda went into a Homer Simpson trance for a second there!
      Wheew! Thanks for the GREAT comment, Grace!

  9. Mama Zen said

    I love it!

  10. jcosmonewbery said

    Sneaky Ninja! Love the surprise.

  11. Sherry Mashburn said

    you snookered me in!

  12. great stuff here C!

    • Thanks, Mike! I appreciate the read and comment very much!

      • you are prolific these days my friend

      • I’m always prolific, Mike. When I started the blog a little over a year ago, I was posting way to much every day. I backed way off, and now I’m trying to only post when there’s a good prompt. My readership and subscribers has really taken off since I dropped the number of post down to a level where folks can enjoy them, while not being bombarded with emails from Marbles in my Pocket. I certainly appreciate you and your comments!

      • keep it up man! I am leaning towards 2 posts a day. One rather newsy or informative like this morning and one going for humor. We will see how it evolves,

  13. Shawna said

    That’s where my mind was going with this prompt too. 🙂

    • Mine didn’t even hesitate! It was five dollar foot long from the git go!
      Thanks for the great comment, Shawna!

      • Shawna said

        We love those too!

  14. hobgoblin2011 said

    Ha, I was totally going to go this direction but opted to be more traditional once I started writing. Glad I didn’t now, as you pretty much said what I wanted to say and much more. fantastic piece thanks.

    • I never been on a subway, but been in a Subway shop many times. It was a no-brainer, hold the mayo, all the way for me!
      Thanks for the visit and comment!

  15. K. McGee said

    Oh how I love this! You caught me completely by surprise with this one.

    • I can’t believe I caught so many with this! I had no idea it was that tricky!
      Thanks for the visit and comment! I’m glad you enjoyed it!

  16. You “scooped me” ! I’m happy it was you ! You definitely should have a big commission from Subway to use this on a poster or something awesome…
    Now, will get my brain from “aura” to “subway”☺.
    Peace,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

  17. Oh yum… excellent, now I’m hungry!!!

  18. Blue Flute said

    Lol, that was great. Nice twist at the end.

  19. leahJlynn said

    Right, during lunch or mid hours of the day on route to where every we need to go. LOL Love it
    http://leah-jamielynn.typepad.com/blog/2012/04/a-day-on-the-platform.html

    • Yes’m, they seem to be on every corner these days!
      Thanks for the visit and comment!

  20. terri0729 said

    I’ve never been on a subway before you just gave me a ride on one 🙂 Thanks for the smile Charlie!! blessings, Terri

    • Well, this wasn’t a REAL subway. Unless they have mustard on them. Which, now that I think about it, they probably do.
      Thanks, Terri!

  21. Gay said

    We have a great one in Port A (where are you anyway?) –love all those different kinds of breads, yum. But we have a BRAND NEW Whataburger right around the corner and now I know you know that’s all kind of good too!

    • Are you kidding me?? My middle name is Whataburger-with-cheese-no tomatoes-coke-to-drink! I LOVE Whataburger! On days Sherry doesn’t come home for lunch, I am there!
      We’re in College Station. Have friends who go to Port A a lot. You probably know one of them; the crazy little blonde gal who won’t give up the karaoke mic after she gets hold of it.
      Thanks for the fun comment! Yum!

  22. Myrna said

    I loved this. Your humor is just what I needed today. What a great response to the prompt.

    • I love it when I can give some one a good laugh. I’m so glad you enjoyed this little taste of Subway humor!
      Thanks for stopping by and leaving the nice comment!

  23. poemsofhateandhope said

    Ha ha ha- this made me smile – such a fun poem…love the way you describe the faces as you get on the train…and I want one of those sandwiches!

  24. Chazinator said

    Aha, there are those subways too, and I gotta admit they do take me on a ride of sorts, especially when I’m hankering to quell those hunger pangs in my growing gut.

    • Yep. I don’t know about those y’all are writing about, but I sure know about these kind!
      Thanks for the visit and comment, Charles!

  25. Now that’s a subway! Laughed at the punchline. Was late when I wrote mine so now a video performance in place

    • Thanks, John! So glad to bring a little laughter your way!
      I appreciate the visit and comment!

  26. Charles, enjoyed this little side-track off the subways the rest of us have taken!! Nicely played!!

    (FYI: Although I appreciate your stopping by, not sure if you meant the comment on my page for me? You mentioned Victoria, and I’m Ginny!! Typo??!! Thanks just the same!)

    • Sorry ’bout that, Ginny! yes, the comment was meant for you!
      Thank you for visiting and commenting!

  27. zongrik said

    i’m glad someone did the subway sandalwhich thing

    alive on subway senryu

    • I had no choice! Oh, wait, I did have a choice; white or wheat!
      Thanks, Zongrik! I appreciate the visit and comment!

  28. Raivenne said

    AHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

    I bow to your humorous ingenuity. Nicely played Mr. Mashburn, nicely played!

    • Thank you, thank you, tha… oh, wait… YOU’RE bowing. Okay okay… I’ll STOP bowing!
      Thanks, Raivenne. I love the comment!

  29. You took the chicken sandwich’s way out, which I almost did,
    but then I realized I could write about the absence
    of something as easily as its presence.
    Anyway, this was yummy!

  30. Btw, the name of your blog reminds me of a lyric from song by Suzanne Vega, “Small Blue Thing”:

    “Today I am
    A small blue thing
    Like a marble
    Or an eye

    With my knees against my mouth
    I am perfectly round
    I am watching you

    I am cold against your skin
    You are perfectly reflected
    I am lost inside your pocket
    I am lost against
    Your fingers”

    etc. Hear it here:

    • Beautiful song, and the lyrics are awesome! I’m going to have to look it up and see who wrote the lyrics.
      Thanks for sharing it with me!

  31. Ruth said

    oh that Subway – I get it. 🙂 I guess they’re pretty much everywhere, aren’t they?

    • Ha! I fooled another one! Yes, they are everywhere these days.
      Thanks for the visit and comment, Ruth!

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