Well! I Nevah! It seems a coup of sorts is afoot at dVerse Poets Pub this afternoon. Claudia has invited—big city dwellers only, it appears—to write something Poetic: Subway. Now, I ask you, what’s a good ol’ boy from Texas know about subways? Well, by gosh, we might just surprise you!
Ah, The Aroma!
For me, it all begins
When you open the door
The aroma assaults you
And the excited looks
Of all the other people
Let you know
This will be an experience
A ride, some would say
Like none other
You stroll along, watching
Making sure it’s all
Just the way you like it
And when you know it is
You give the guy
A token of your appreciation
In the way of
Five dollars
As advertised
Then grab a seat
And enjoy
A delicious
Foot long
Subway sandwich
Mmmm mmmm mm!
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claudia said
haha…this is really cool charles…you can watch people at subway as good as on the subway ha…loved it
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, Claudia! I couldn’t NOT participate!
aprille said
Collapsed in laughter, yet again.
Marvellous.
charlesmashburn said
I’m glad you got a good laugh out of it, Aprille!
Thanks for the visit and comment!
Daydreamertoo said
Haha… well it was about a subway!
charlesmashburn said
That’s what I’m talkin bout!!
Thanks for the visit, laugh, and comment, Daydreamer!
brian miller said
haha…spicy italian all the way for me please…lol…and for five dollars it can not be beat let me tell you…love there hot relish too…nice twist ont he prompt sir…
charlesmashburn said
I knew you’d like this one, Brian. I coulda picked you as a spicy italian kinda guy, too!
Thanks for the great comment!
Mary said
You have given me an idea. I love subway sandwiches. Haven’t been on the other kind of subway in a decade!
charlesmashburn said
I love them, too, but Sherry isn’t that hip on ’em, so I don’t partaake too often.
Thanks for the visit anc comment, Mary!
whimsygizmo said
Ha! Nice twist! Love it! Well done.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you! I appreciate the visit and comment!
Chris Lawrence said
Might be light but full of flavor, very tasty
charlesmashburn said
That’s what I’m talkin bout!
Thanks for the visit and comment, Chris!
Heaven (@asweetlust) said
I like mine grilled chicken with lots of cheese…ha..ha… ~
charlesmashburn said
mmmmmmm… griiiiilled chiiiickeeeen & loooooots of cheeeeessse
OH! Dang! Kinda went into a Homer Simpson trance for a second there!
Wheew! Thanks for the GREAT comment, Grace!
Mama Zen said
I love it!
charlesmashburn said
Ha! Thanks, Mama Zen!
jcosmonewbery said
Sneaky Ninja! Love the surprise.
charlesmashburn said
Ha! Did I gitcha?
Thanks for the visit and Comment!
Sherry Mashburn said
you snookered me in!
charlesmashburn said
Ha! I knew you’d bite!
The Blissful Adventurer said
great stuff here C!
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, Mike! I appreciate the read and comment very much!
The Blissful Adventurer said
you are prolific these days my friend
charlesmashburn said
I’m always prolific, Mike. When I started the blog a little over a year ago, I was posting way to much every day. I backed way off, and now I’m trying to only post when there’s a good prompt. My readership and subscribers has really taken off since I dropped the number of post down to a level where folks can enjoy them, while not being bombarded with emails from Marbles in my Pocket. I certainly appreciate you and your comments!
The Blissful Adventurer said
keep it up man! I am leaning towards 2 posts a day. One rather newsy or informative like this morning and one going for humor. We will see how it evolves,
Shawna said
That’s where my mind was going with this prompt too. 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Mine didn’t even hesitate! It was five dollar foot long from the git go!
Thanks for the great comment, Shawna!
Shawna said
We love those too!
hobgoblin2011 said
Ha, I was totally going to go this direction but opted to be more traditional once I started writing. Glad I didn’t now, as you pretty much said what I wanted to say and much more. fantastic piece thanks.
charlesmashburn said
I never been on a subway, but been in a Subway shop many times. It was a no-brainer, hold the mayo, all the way for me!
Thanks for the visit and comment!
K. McGee said
Oh how I love this! You caught me completely by surprise with this one.
charlesmashburn said
I can’t believe I caught so many with this! I had no idea it was that tricky!
Thanks for the visit and comment! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
siggiofmaine said
You “scooped me” ! I’m happy it was you ! You definitely should have a big commission from Subway to use this on a poster or something awesome…
Now, will get my brain from “aura” to “subway”☺.
Peace,
Siggi in Downeast Maine
charlesmashburn said
Ha! Y’all are too much fun!
Thanks for the comment, Siggi!
pandamoniumcat said
Oh yum… excellent, now I’m hungry!!!
charlesmashburn said
Surely there’s a Subway nearby?
Thanks for the visit and comment
Blue Flute said
Lol, that was great. Nice twist at the end.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
leahJlynn said
Right, during lunch or mid hours of the day on route to where every we need to go. LOL Love it
http://leah-jamielynn.typepad.com/blog/2012/04/a-day-on-the-platform.html
charlesmashburn said
Yes’m, they seem to be on every corner these days!
Thanks for the visit and comment!
terri0729 said
I’ve never been on a subway before you just gave me a ride on one 🙂 Thanks for the smile Charlie!! blessings, Terri
charlesmashburn said
Well, this wasn’t a REAL subway. Unless they have mustard on them. Which, now that I think about it, they probably do.
Thanks, Terri!
Gay said
We have a great one in Port A (where are you anyway?) –love all those different kinds of breads, yum. But we have a BRAND NEW Whataburger right around the corner and now I know you know that’s all kind of good too!
charlesmashburn said
Are you kidding me?? My middle name is Whataburger-with-cheese-no tomatoes-coke-to-drink! I LOVE Whataburger! On days Sherry doesn’t come home for lunch, I am there!
We’re in College Station. Have friends who go to Port A a lot. You probably know one of them; the crazy little blonde gal who won’t give up the karaoke mic after she gets hold of it.
Thanks for the fun comment! Yum!
Myrna said
I loved this. Your humor is just what I needed today. What a great response to the prompt.
charlesmashburn said
I love it when I can give some one a good laugh. I’m so glad you enjoyed this little taste of Subway humor!
Thanks for stopping by and leaving the nice comment!
poemsofhateandhope said
Ha ha ha- this made me smile – such a fun poem…love the way you describe the faces as you get on the train…and I want one of those sandwiches!
charlesmashburn said
Glad you enjoyed it, Stu! I appreciate the visit and comment!
Chazinator said
Aha, there are those subways too, and I gotta admit they do take me on a ride of sorts, especially when I’m hankering to quell those hunger pangs in my growing gut.
charlesmashburn said
Yep. I don’t know about those y’all are writing about, but I sure know about these kind!
Thanks for the visit and comment, Charles!
John (@bookdreamer) said
Now that’s a subway! Laughed at the punchline. Was late when I wrote mine so now a video performance in place
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, John! So glad to bring a little laughter your way!
I appreciate the visit and comment!
Ginny Brannan said
Charles, enjoyed this little side-track off the subways the rest of us have taken!! Nicely played!!
(FYI: Although I appreciate your stopping by, not sure if you meant the comment on my page for me? You mentioned Victoria, and I’m Ginny!! Typo??!! Thanks just the same!)
charlesmashburn said
Sorry ’bout that, Ginny! yes, the comment was meant for you!
Thank you for visiting and commenting!
zongrik said
i’m glad someone did the subway sandalwhich thing
alive on subway senryu
charlesmashburn said
I had no choice! Oh, wait, I did have a choice; white or wheat!
Thanks, Zongrik! I appreciate the visit and comment!
Raivenne said
AHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
I bow to your humorous ingenuity. Nicely played Mr. Mashburn, nicely played!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, thank you, tha… oh, wait… YOU’RE bowing. Okay okay… I’ll STOP bowing!
Thanks, Raivenne. I love the comment!
poetcolette said
You took the chicken sandwich’s way out, which I almost did,
but then I realized I could write about the absence
of something as easily as its presence.
Anyway, this was yummy!
charlesmashburn said
And, you did it well!
Thanks for the visit and comment!
poetcolette said
Btw, the name of your blog reminds me of a lyric from song by Suzanne Vega, “Small Blue Thing”:
“Today I am
A small blue thing
Like a marble
Or an eye
With my knees against my mouth
I am perfectly round
I am watching you
I am cold against your skin
You are perfectly reflected
I am lost inside your pocket
I am lost against
Your fingers”
etc. Hear it here:
charlesmashburn said
Beautiful song, and the lyrics are awesome! I’m going to have to look it up and see who wrote the lyrics.
Thanks for sharing it with me!
Ruth said
oh that Subway – I get it. 🙂 I guess they’re pretty much everywhere, aren’t they?
charlesmashburn said
Ha! I fooled another one! Yes, they are everywhere these days.
Thanks for the visit and comment, Ruth!