Claudia has the evening shift at the dVerse Poets Pub tonight, hosting Poetics: Fun Fair and has invited us to write about the fair. You know, the one with all the rides and booths and good stuff to eat. So, naturally, I took a trip back in time and came up with the following. I hope you enjoy it!
All Wide-eyed and Loving Me
I was eleven and knew I liked girls
But wasn’t sure why
I’d heard all the stories about love
“Went” with lots of girls
For two or three weeks at a time
Even kissed a few; maybe four
And that was the real deal
Scary though
I couldn’t figure it out
How something so exciting
Could be so utterly terrifying
But sometimes it was
Everything
All I could think about
Was kissing another girl
Maybe even falling in love
That would be the bomb
Then along came Boom Boom
And that song about some park
Someplace I’d never been
Saying how great a kiss could feel
Stopped at the top of the ferris wheel
I had to do it
So I laid my plans
Got up the courage
Asked her to ride with me
At the fall carnival
Praying the wheel would stop
With us at the top
So I could make my move
A bundle of nerves
Not saying a word
Feeling her staring at me
All wide-eyed and loving me
I just knew it
Then the wheel slowed
I gripped the bar and closed my eyes
And when we stopped
The car gently rocked
A cool breeze on my hot face
I felt like I was gonna be sick
But that wasn’t what did it
I think it was the corn dogs
Or maybe the cotton candy
Or maybe I was just scared of falling
In love
Before I was twelve
I decided not to kiss her
Copyright © 2012 C. Mashburn
When I saw Claudia’s prompt, a song started playing in my head. Then this poem came rushing out, and sadly, it’s pretty much true. The song I refer to was called Palisades Park, and was first done in 1962 by Billy “Boom Boom” Cannon. It was one of those accidents; flip side of a song they thought would be a hit that got played by accident, then went to #3 on the charts. I hope you enjoyed my little ride on the ferris wheel!
Mary said
Charles, the youthful innocence in this poem made me smile. I’d say it was probably going on the ferris wheel after eating corn dogs. Fun memory to look back on though, I am sure…and there WAS plenty of time to fall in love!
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the wonderful comment, Mary! I’m glad it made you smile!
Sherry Mashburn said
Awww . . . .
charlesmashburn said
hmmmm… …
brian miller said
haha probably a good thing if you were feeling sick…that would have made an impression you may never have gotten over….but romance at the top of the wheel gotta love that and that is what love felt like back in those days too…ha we were so young and dumb…lol…good piece man…
charlesmashburn said
Yep! It was an exciting time!
Thanks for the great comment, Brian!
hedgewitch said
Probably the right decision at the time, Charles, considering the stomach and all. Loved this–very real feel for that very awkward but exciting time before things actually get real.
charlesmashburn said
The decision was made out of fear (which was the probable cause of the stomach situation). Those things seemed to happen daily back in those days. Girls were scary!
Thanks for the visit and comment!
zongrik said
cute story. nothing is scarier than falling in love and getting rejected.
/roller coaster of dysfunction
charlesmashburn said
That was the big fear on those days (and several decades later as well); rejection.
Thanks for the visit and comment!
gardenlilie said
Cute and you decided not to kiss her. Go back up there and do it ;))!!!
charlesmashburn said
I was too skeert!
Thanks for the encouragement, though!
claudia said
oh i enjoyed the ride a lot…what a lovely story…a bit sad that you didn’t kiss her…bet she thought or hoped you would…smiles..
charlesmashburn said
She probably did, but I was so shy at thaat age, I figured she didn’t, and didn’t want to risk it. Silly kid.
Thanks for the visit and comment, Claudia!
welshstream said
Ha ha …. great build up leading to fine last stanza and the crunch line. Good work
charlesmashburn said
Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
Heaven (@asweetlust) said
Nice share…I was right there with you on the seat, waiting for it ~
Happy Sunday ~
charlesmashburn said
She probably was too! Haha!
Thanks for the visit and comment!
Daydreamertoo said
Awww…. I bet you sure made up for not kissing her after that though. The innocence in this is so lovely! Exciting, the thrills of the first interest and stirrings of young love 🙂
charlesmashburn said
No telling what I did after that! I was a shy little fella back then. Most of the exciting stuff was all in my head!
Thanks for the nice comment, Daydreamer!
Mary Mansfield said
This is so sweet, a great description of what love was like before all the adult pressures and expectations set in.
charlesmashburn said
You mean that reality thing I’ve always heard about??
Thanks for the visit and comment, Mary!
Nikhil Jain said
I loved this…. You rocked 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, Nikhil! I appreciate the visit and comment!
ManicDdaily said
Hi Charles – agree with Hedge that it was probably right decision at the time – there are times when anticipation is all–Hard to say though! Very sweet poem. K.
charlesmashburn said
If I could’ve bottled all the anticipation from those years, it would be worth a fortune today. Kind of like all those old baseball cards my dad threw away.
Thanks for the visit and comment, K!
shanyns said
This is very good, nerves bundled up and then add in a girl – you have a very good story here! Nicely done.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the nice comment, Shanyns!
ordinarylifelessordinary said
What a wonderful collection of memories Charles, sweet nostalgia, you have a way of doing that with heaps of personality to bring it to life.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the awesome comment, Vanessa!
Laurie Kolp said
So sweet, those innocent childhood crushes. Glad you didn’t get sick on her, though.
charlesmashburn said
Thankfully, that never happened!
Thanks for the visit and comment, Laurie!