I usually write a short story for the Bluebell Short Story Slam, but the week 11 prompt seemed to cry out for a poem, and so I heeded its call. I hope you enjoy it.
Bubbles and Lies
They usually come in bunches
One leading to another
Obscuring the truth of who we are
But they soon drift away
Leaving the others to burst in time
And always sooner than we expect
We are exposed to the world
Some are big, some are small
Some reflect the light in beautiful ways
Fooling those who witness them
But only for a short while
Bubbles and lies cannot survive
Unless time can be stopped
Or the expelling of them does not
Or… they become our truth
What will we do
When the bubbles are all gone
When the world sees us clearly
As we stand naked and ashamed
Will we hang our heads
Or quickly dip into the jar
Wave our arm and like magic
Remain a figment of our delusion
Copyright © C. Mashburn 2011
terri0729 said
Well done Charlie!!! Lol, your were lies and mine were worries! Fine prompt this week, wasn’t it?! Peace and love, Terri
charlesmashburn said
Ha! Ain’t we the pair!?!?
terri0729 said
LOL! Hey, great minds think alike 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Yes’m!
Ina said
Hi Charles, I love it how you start with bubbles being like lies 🙂 That is a surprising comparisement, so completely in reverse of the expected! And it works very well. Lovely poem.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the kind comments, Ina!
sherry mashburn said
Great poem with much insight!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, my dear!
Bat-Ami Gordin said
ha, first you read my bubbles, then i read yours now i send you to my next piece for dverse – http://zongrik.wordpress.com/wp-admin/post.php?post=601&action=edit where in the comments there is a big discussion about writers and the truth
charlesmashburn said
The link did not work!
Thank you for the visit!
Altonian said
Impressive! I would never have thought a few bubbles could inspire such philosophy.
charlesmashburn said
I didn’t realize I was getting philosophical; it kind of just came out!
Thanks for the read and comment!
mish said
What an unusual comparison … bubbles and lies … an interesting interpretation of the pic .
charlesmashburn said
The idea sprang from the fact you cannot see the person behind the bubbles.
Thanks for the visit and comment, mish!
carefreewanderer said
Bubbles…..As beautiful as they are,its just a temporary illusion.You have portrayed it so eloquently.Lovely stuff 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thank you so much for the kind words!
Ed Williams said
I like the way that you write about bubbles being a shield to truth. Nice work!
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, Ed. I appreciate the visit and comment!
tigercity said
better to stand in naked truth than cloaked in dark delusion.. very true Charles..
charlesmashburn said
Thanks! I appreciate the comment!
Helena (Hey! Lena) said
I shall now look at bubbles in a new manner. What a compelling poem.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the comment, Lena!
liv2write2day said
Very effective simile, Charles. As always, thank you for sharing your wisdom.
charlesmashburn said
Oh, good golly. Wisdom? I better go read that again and see what I said!
Thank you for those very kind words, liv!
Sherrie Theriault said
Wonderful as always!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you very much, Sherrie!
Ken said
Good one bro! I remember that Roy used to say if you told the same lie enough it became the truth. LOL , Seems to be working for most of the politicians. Cheers Ken
charlesmashburn said
You seen right through me on that one, Ken!
Kay Salady said
Oh, Charles, you have written brilliantly with such philosophical wit. xoXox
charlesmashburn said
Thank you so much, Kay! You are too, kind!
The Noiseless Cuckooclock said
a gem entry, your take is surprising to me.
extraordinary piece.
Thanks for sharing.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the visit and comments! Very much appreciated!
bendedspoon said
Hard truth in fragile bubbles — another bow to you wise and wonderful man! You made me nod in each line. Oh yes, bubbles and lies cannot survive! 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thank you so much. I am blown away by the wonderful comments this poem has elicited.
Sarah Johnston said
This is so well done charlie and thanks for visiting my site and leaving such a wonderful comment. I do enjoy reading your site each time I come here and it is such a pleasure
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/29/bubbling-potion-of-love/
charlesmashburn said
You are quite welcome, and thank you very much for the nice comment!
manicddaily said
Such a great idea . Wonderful close.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the visit and comment!
cj Schlottman said
“Or… they become our truth……” I love your analogy of bubbles and lies. It’s very strong, and you have written it down beautifully.
Namaste…………cj
charlesmashburn said
Thank you very much, cj! I appreciate your visit and comments!
ghosterb said
Very well done and so very true my friend.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you! I appreciate the fine comment!
vivinfrance said
This poem works on multiple levels. A very clever interpretation of the prompt. Thank you for your visit to my blog.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the nice comment.
You’re very welcome for the visit to your blog!
staffordray said
“Remain a figment of our delusion”. We have a gene for it apparently!
Nice to meet you Charles.
charlesmashburn said
It seems it is so.
Nice to meet you, as well.
Thanks for the visit and comment!
Pushpee said
lovely..way to go!!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you! Your comment and visit are appreciated!
Jamie said
I like the linking of bubbles with lies.
Bubbles are of course a lot prettier than the lies we tell…
A very clever last verse you wrote there.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks very much, Jamie! I appreciate your comments!
Inside the Mind of Isadora said
Interesting take on the prompt pix. I see you have added a twist to bubbles. I will have to re-read this as bubbles always seem happy to me. I want to absorb the other side. This one gets you thinking, Charles.
Blessings,
Isadora
http://insidethemindofisadora.wordpress.com/2011/09/30/bubble-magic/
charlesmashburn said
I surely mean no disrespect to bubbles, Isadora! And definitely don’t want to change your mind about them. Bubbles are indeed a wonderful and beautiful thing!
Thank you for the read and comment, my bubbly friend!
henryclemmons said
A very good analogy as the life span of a bubble is usually not that uch more than a lie.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, Henry, for the visit and comment!
thingy said
Fabulously clever, and I’m not lying. : )
charlesmashburn said
hmmmm… how can I be sure?
Thanks for the great comment, thingy!
poetsandall said
well done, I love it 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thank you! I appreciate the comment!
A.B. Thomas said
Fascinating! I never considered the theological or philosphical ramifications of the continuance of the bubble – thanks for the mind candy~
charlesmashburn said
Me neither! Just kinda popped into my mind when I saw the picture!
Thanks for the read and comment, A.B.!
Morning said
a unique and powerful take.
love it.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, morning! Glad you enjoyed it!
Elyas Mulu Kiros said
Great poem! 🙂 Great Comparison! 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, Elyas! I appreciate the great comments!
Jeanie McBain said
I love the way you have written this Charles. It’s powerful and a joy to read. 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thank you very much, Jeanie! I appreciate your wonderful comments!
cheri said
i would think all the comments you get…alot from perfect strangers..should affirm you Charlie…you have been gifted with the ability to tell a story that makes people think…and knowledge is power!!
well done my friend!! and to think you can do that in such a small amount of words!!
charlesmashburn said
I just do what I do, m’dear. I don’t give much thought to it any more (I don’t know that I ever did) and what comes out is what comes out.
As for the few words, I have learned that the less words used, the powerful the message seems to be. I actually go back at least once on everything I write to see what can be eliminated.
Thank you for the awesome comments this morning!
Love you!
wordcoaster said
Thought provoking–quite a contrast to my bubble poem. I like it 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Contrast is good!
Thanks for the visit and comment!
lolamouse said
Nicely done! Very apt metaphor.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, Lola!
emanita01 said
Hi. Yes I did enjoy your writing very much.
“Bubbles are much like lies
They usually come in bunches
One leading to another
Obscuring the truth of who we are ”
Poignant.
Thanks for leading me here 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the visit and comments, Emanita!
Write Girl said
Beautiful poem on bubbles. Your last stanza is magical…may we all dwell in the delusion of bubbles : )
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the beautiful comments! I appreciate them very much!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the beautiful comments, write girl!
Christopher Raley said
Really good poem Charles. Frank and explicite but with some great images like, “Some reflect the light in beautiful ways”. And that last stanza is wonderful. Well done. Thanks for stopping by too.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the great comments, Christopher!
pure2core said
Your words are amazing … we think almost in the same way sir… but I feel your words are more richer than mine 😀 Thank you for share…
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the wonderful comment! I apreciate it very much.
christine said
lies eventually burst unable to be contained within the thin layer they lie in, brilliant analogy
charlesmashburn said
Thank you very much, Christine!
e.a.s. demers said
Awesome take on the prompt!
I didn’t expect a poem from you (though this one is quite lovely) … I was kinda expecting a snarky little tale about a snarky little bubble— but, when the poetry muse beckons, one must definitely listen!
“Bubbles are like lies, they usually come in bunches…” <—— Perfect opening line! I'm really digging the symbolism in your poem 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the great comments. Yes, when I saw the prompt, it screamed poem, so poem it was!
Phunter said
I came here to see, apart from me, who else thought lies were nothing more than a bunch of bubbles.
My spark was generated from a different source than yours – bubbles in water.
market bubbles are a manifestation of concerted lies.
lies and bubbles are both empty without any substance.
eventually they surface no matter what..
but before surfacing, they inevitably expand gathering more vanity
charlesmashburn said
A good take on it! Thanks for the visit and comment!