This a short excerpt (Chapter 2, actually) of a novella I wrote, but did not publish, about ten years ago. The story is what I imagine could become of us if we continue down the path we now tread. Tyranny has been subtly stalking us for many years but is now charging full speed, and with rabid determination. As with the woman in my story, we lovers of freedom and liberty may be left wondering if perhaps it would have been better had we not awoken from our slumber. In my opinion, that would only be true if we die in our sleep. JMHO
Dearest John:
The woman stood alone, the sparkling sand cool on her bare feet, watching the ship approach. While her heart yearned that it be real, she knew it could not be. It appeared ancient, though its white sails stood in sharp contrast to the dawn sky. The sun was rising and it caused the sails to glow as though they were lighted by florescent tubes; pristine blue waters shimmered in its glow. The lighthouse at the tip of the isle, she knew to be real, though she wondered if its purpose had changed. She thought it to be a guardhouse these days, and below it she assumed were barracks where the men were kept. She could hear them singing in the deep of night; always the same song; always low and reverent in tone. She prayed that was where they’d taken John. She prayed he was still alive. She prayed for Amazing Grace.
The fence which divided the island was tall and electrified; generators ran day and night to supply power to the island. The women on this side were allowed to roam free, and ventured often to the fence in hopes they might glimpse, even for a moment, one of the men they listened to each night. They saw no sign of life and agreed among themselves the men were never allowed outside.
A tear slipped down her cheek; the gown she wore rustled in the breeze, and the worn piece of paper she held in her hand fluttered, as well. She looked down at it, wondering would her husband’s eyes ever read the words she’d written upon it:
Dearest John: I awoke as the last of them was leaving. He turned and saw me staring, and I wonder had I not stirred and lifted my head, if they would they have left me there, to find you gone when later I opened my eyes. I have not been nor have I been harmed nor mistreated in any way. We are kept in comfortable rooms on this island. There are men on the other side. We hear them singing at night. I pray you are there. I pray you are safe. I know you are still alive. I can feel you. Were you gone, I would know. If this note finds its way to you, please, know I love you. They asked me one day if I would die for you. I said yes, and they laughed. but I will if it comes to that. The guard is coming now! I must go!
P.S. – I am not afraid.
Sherry Mashburn said
Beautiful . . . both are not afraid
charlesmashburn said
That’s what I’m talkin bout!
ghosterb said
Very nice my friend, I like it a lot!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you. Appreciate the comment!
Morning said
driving emotions.
a fabulous continuity,
Thanks for sharing…
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the visit and great comments!
zongrik said
Interesting trend -> second poem in a story this week.
charlesmashburn said
It just seemed appropriate, and it fit the prompt so well. I’m still pondering a novel based on these poems.
Thanks for the comments!
Kay Salady said
What imagination! Always a pleasure to read your writing, Charles.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, Kay. It is a pleasure to read your comments! Very much appreciated!
Mom said
another good one Charlie, keep on keeping on
charlesmashburn said
Okay, Mom!
terri0729 said
I loved this one Charles! Very moving. Blessings, Terri
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, Terri. I appreciate your comments!
The Cello Strings said
you make everyone smile.
what a fantastic sequel..
well penned.
😉
charlesmashburn said
Thank you so much for the visit and nice comments!
Inside the Mind of Isadora said
Emotions exquisitely expressed of a woman despartely hoping that she and the one she loves will be reunited once again. Extra praise for the story / poem combination.
Outstanding, Charles.
Adieu,
Isadora
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the awesome comments, Isadora! Very much appreciated!
Ina said
This is so very romantic, it reminded me of the tv series Angélique somehow http://youtu.be/0g4NiHef4Ks , beautiful!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the visit and nice comments, Ina!
Rosie@mygardenhaven said
Go for it, write your novel now that you have a thread going there. Sounds mysterious and that’s a good start.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the encouragement, Rosie! It’s been a few years since I’ve written a novel, and my fingers are starting to itch. Might dive in any day now. Trying to wait till we get back from our mini vacation to Phoenix, though. We will see!
I’m thinking the “Dearest Wife:”–in its poem form–will be the prologue.
Thanks for the visit!
Kellie Elmore said
Just beautiful. Thank you for leading me through a wonderful visual journey! Happy you directed me here. 🙂
charlesmashburn said
I’m glad you enjoyed it, Kellie. In case you haven’t noticed the other comments, You may have inspired a novel with your postcard prompt. I’m strongly leaning toward it!
Thanks for stopping by!
Janrae Mendoza said
I love this, the emotion drawn in the piece is exquisite in its own way …
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the wonderful comment!
Classic NYer said
This is so sweet…
charlesmashburn said
Thank you!
The Noiseless Cuckooclock said
part of big project, oh?
well done.
a novel could have poetry in it, correct?
excellent work.
🙂
charlesmashburn said
I woould probably use the poems as prologues. I’ve even gone as far as possibly two novels; Dearest Wife:, followed by Dearest John:. These things usually rattle around in my mind for awhile and then demand to be released. Yes! Very big project!
Thanks for the encouragement and compliment!
Sherrie Theriault said
Very nice! You’ve hit all the right notes!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, Sherrie! Your comments are always appreciated!
Stafford said
Both the background story and the poem are so intriguing… and are begging for background explanation!
charlesmashburn said
Stafford: Did you read Dearest Wife? It gives a slight hint about what’s going on. You might have to wait for the novel though. More and more, I think it is about to happen. Publish in early spring perhaps? I could use a good agent of anyone out there knows of one that might be interested.
Thanks for the visit and wonderful comments!
mish said
You’ve written a novel ? That’s awesome ! Can I purchase a copy … and please don’t tell me on e-books … my techno ‘tard brain is still playing catch-up !
Beautifully crafted Charles … and the tone is just right !
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the comment/compliment, Mish!
Yes, I’ve actually written about a dozen novels. Only two published though, and the links are below. Quite exciting little stories! The first one, Devil’s Dust, I describe as “sex, drugs, murder and mayhem”, and the other, Shelter; well… just read the back of the book, and tell me you don’t want to read it.
Signed copies of both books avalable here —> Texas Trading PostThe Devil’s Dust
Shelter
thingy said
Indeed. This is the start of a fantastic story. I hope there will be more. Very powerful.
charlesmashburn said
I may continue the series in poem form. It seems to have life to it.
Thanks for the encouraging comments!
tasithoughts said
Really captured me. Great character building. Thanks for sharing your work and journey.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/09/01/ive-got-you/
charlesmashburn said
Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for stopping by and commenting!
manicddaily said
Good use of prompt! Reminds (in reverse) of Tosca.
charlesmashburn said
I’m not an opera kind of guy (you probably knew that) but I see what you mean by the reverse Tosca reference.
I appreciate the the comments!
Miss Kitten said
Absolutely captivating. You really captured the spirit of the challenge so well.
Here’s my humble entry:
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, Miss Kitten! I’m glad you like it.
I’d aready read your entry and enjoyed it. I was only having fun with the comment about it being “wordy”.
I appreciate your visit and comments!
Miss Kitten said
No worries. It was a “wordy” piece after all. 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Just want you to know I did not intend to be critical. It was a fun entry to read!
bornstoryteller said
yes, there is a novel, or Novella, in the making here. DO IT!!
Stu
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the visit and the encouragement, Stu. A novel is definitely rumbling around in my ol’ brain!
The Orange Tree said
creative and beautiful…
a jump start for a longer story indeed.
🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thank you! Your comments are very much aprreciated!
kez said
thanks for this it was beautiful … I haven;t even attempted one yet but I will …would like to take this opportunity to say thank you for all your support and comments on my blog …Thank you x
charlesmashburn said
I will be watching for yours.
You are quite welcome for the comments and support. I like to think “encouragement” is my middle name.
Thank you for your comments and compliments, too!
Emmanuel Ibok said
A sad one indeed…being deprived of love, breaks the heart. I hope they re-unite. Nicely done!
Cheers!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the visit and comments, Emmanuel! I appreciate them very much!
Wyoming Diva said
Nicely done!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you very much!
bendedspoon said
Courage — amazing grace 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Yes! Thanks for the visit and comment!
A.B. Thomas said
A strong piece weaved fantastically into such a vividly described setting!
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, A.B! I appreciate the great comments!
Chimnese said
What beautiful words you’ve written Charles.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you very much!
I appreciate your visit and comment!
cheri said
well my friend you have done it again:)…PERFECT!
…there’s nothing really i can add to all the encouraging and insightful comments you have already received, except this
YOU ARE AWESOME!!!! and the world is Blessed because you WRITE!!
charlesmashburn said
You are wonderful, Cheri dear! Who could ask for a better friend? Love you!
Janrae Mendoza said
I like this one! The words are well written… ❤
charlesmashburn said
Thank you! I appreciate the visit and comment!
Sarah Johnston said
I love this. You too see the ship approaching like I do. Some see it leaving. I love how each person views this image so differently
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/05/the-milky-seas/
charlesmashburn said
Paintings are like poetry–the viewer/reader is able to see it as they wish.
Thanks for the visit and comments, Sarah. Very much appreciated!
Poetry & Icecream said
Very intriguing. I couldn’t stop reading and I wanted it to keep going. Well done 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thanks! I may very well continue this.
I appreciate your visit and comments!
The Cello Strings said
stunning…
🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thanks! Visit and comment much appreciated!
Serena Shay said
Intriguing letter from a strong love! Nice job. 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thank yoou, Serena! I appreciate your visit and comment!
lolamouse said
Very intriguing and romantic but not overly sentimental. Great read!
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the visit and comments, Lola! Very much appreciated!
celticsea/Colleen Murphy said
I can definitely see how this piece was inspired by the picture. You certainly leave yourself open to continuing this story. Well done!
charlesmashburn said
Yes it was inspired by the picture, but was also a follow up to my post titled, Dearest wife.
Thanks for the visit and comments!
Helena (Hey! Lena) said
I loved the drama in this one. It’s heartrending to know that from the awful circumstance they are in, they still give hope for the other with just a fraction of luck that they’ll each receive the others postcard. Lovely stuff!
charlesmashburn said
Hey! Lena: Thanks for taking the time to read both of these. The second one was kind of accidental. The Bluebell prompt was simply too perfect to let slide by.
So glad you enjoyed them, and I appreciate the great comments!
e.a.s. demers said
Wonderful! Deep and moving!
This tastes like a snippet of a much larger story… seems there’s something hanging out in the periphery— or, maybe that’s just me wishing there was a bigger story 🙂
charlesmashburn said
I am strongly considering this and it prequel, Dearest Wife:, as fodder for a novel.
Thanks for the great comments!
charlesmashburn said
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