This is part two of the four part series of poems I call Changed. If you missed part one, She Beckons Me Come, you can read it now by clicking on the title. Part three, In Dreams, and four, The Battle, will be posted October 9 and 16, respectively.
All four are being posted on Gooseberry Garden’s Poetry Picnic.
Changed
Part Two:
Yearning Heart
I run to the place I last saw her
Her scent is alive in the air
Mixture of pine, earth and heat
Was not long ago she was there
I follow her essence blindly
Her presence lies thick on my skin
Passion and wanting drive me
I begin the change once again
Heart aching, as bones are moving
Hair and hide replace skin
I groan; half pain, half pleasure
I will have her, yet know not when
On four legs I prowl the forest
Yearning heart the driving force
An ache in my loins, eyes glowing
Feet silent on forest floor
‘Cross the meadow then scent is gone
A growl from deep in my chest
I travel worn trail to top of the hill
Then stand alone upon the crest
Baring great teeth, I snarl at the world
To the moon I sing my sorrow
Lay then, on the rock, and sleep
Dream of finding her on the morrow
Copyright © C. Mashburn
Life: Between the lines said
“I follow her essence blindly” that is what I think when one loves, it is about the essence of a person, well put 🙂
happy gooseberry day!!!
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charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the visit and nice comments!
Sherry Mashburn said
erotic and moving . . .
charlesmashburn said
OH-Kay!
Morning said
scent is live in the air
where she was there…
very enchanting lines, well done.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the visit and comments!
Andy said
Hello Charles.
This one is a little sadder than the last.
I sense the yearning growing stronger & the determination to possess his love interest.
Very nicely penned.
See you next week for Part3.
Thanks also for the visit & comment. Much appreciated.
Unchain My Heart
charlesmashburn said
Yes, it is getting sadder. Thanks so much for reading and commenting.
Elyas Mulu Kiros said
Beautiful piece, Charles!! Melancholic, sweet, and joyful memories packed in one piece! Thanks for sharing!!! 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the visit and comments, Elyas!
siggiofmaine said
Enjoyed immensely … my first visit to your site…will return to read more.
☮ Siggi in Downeast Maine
charlesmashburn said
I’m glad you stopped by, Siggi! And, please, DO come again!
I appreciate the visit and comment!
Christopher Raley said
I like this series and the personification you’re working with here Charles. Good job. Here’s mine:
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, Christopher! I appreciate the visit and comment!
dhitzunako said
Wow, part two. Here, you focus on his loneliness. I’m wondering now, will he find her? Well, gotta keep my eyes on your blog then. 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Tune in next week; same time, same channel!
Thank you for the visit and comment!
mrsjacoby19 said
Aww this piece is beautiful! To viciously want! Outstanding! 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, Mrs. Jacoby!
I appreciate the visit and awesome comments!
Rinkly Rimes said
An unusual approach; human passion in the non-human.
charlesmashburn said
Does such a think exist, or is it mythical?
Thanks for the visit and comments!
Kay Salady said
“to the moon I sing my sorrow” – great write Charles!
charlesmashburn said
I liked that line, too, Kay!
Thanks for the visit and comment!
chimnese said
amazing and i like the flow of the poem..takes u places..
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charlesmashburn said
Thnak you, Chim!
I appreciate your visit and comment!
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charlesmashburn said
Thank you very much. I am honored that you include me in this award.
Shashi (@VerseEveryDay) said
hi C Mashburn
Ahh!! Dreaming of finding her morrow… the search for her in that place… is not really away its usually within… we comb our memories for her scent all the time… I loved your lines..
‘Her scent is alive in the air
Mixture of pine, earth and heat’
good image there…
Thanks for sharing…
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/10/whispers-love-and-loss-butterfly.html
At twitter @VerseEveryDay
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, Shashi! Your thoughtful comments are very much appreciated!
Daydreamertoo said
Very image filled, powerful thoughts of the creature, with an overriding sense of danger, hunger and longing. A passionate write.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the wonderful comments, Daydreamer!
Waynette said
Very haunting to me. I feel the sense of searching and wanting
charlesmashburn said
Yes. Maybe not in a good way. Too hungry. too intense. Misguided? We shall see. Stay tuned for part three!
Kellie Elmore said
Beautifully sad. Another amazing chapter!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, Kellie! I’m glad you’re enjoying the series!
Ina said
Beautiful and sad, very well done! I am going to look up “morrow”, I only knew this word tomorrow.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the nice comments, Ina.
Actually, I looked up morrow, too. I wrote tomorrow at first, but felt the use of “morrow” added a certain touch. Had to make sure it was a word, and it fit, before I used it though.
cj Schlottman said
First, thank you so much for the lovely comment you left on Bonfire. You are kind..
Now, the concrete images in this piece are stunningly visual.
“Her presence lies thick on my skin.”
“Her scent is alive in the air Mixture of pine, earth and heat…”
“Heart aching, as bones are moving
Hair and hide replace skin”
This is good stuff! I usually find weakness in rhyming poems, a kind of straining to make the words match. Not so here. You really make it work
Namaste……………cj
charlesmashburn said
You are welcome and deserving of the comment.
Thank you for the awesome comments here on my blog for this poem!
I agree with your assessment of rhyming poems. Believe me, I have written many that I look back on in wide-eyed horror. I think you will find that most I post on my blog and on the various poetry sites are equal to this one in their rhyming quality. I am very selective about what I expose to the public eye.
ghosterb said
Very nice my friend, I liked it alot! It reminds me of one of mine :o)
charlesmashburn said
Thank you so much!
I’d love to see the one it reminds you of. Send me the link, if you don’t mind.
Janrae Mendoza said
This is outstanding. i like the way the lines are delivered. good job. 😀
charlesmashburn said
Thank you very much, Janrae. Your visit anc kind comments are appreciated!
Jeanie McBain said
Charles, this is truly outstanding, I thoroughly enjoyed it. ‘To the moon I sing my sorrow’ reminds me of a lonely wolf. wonderful
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, Jeanie! I appreciate the wonderful comments!
Martin Lochner said
the yearning of a wolf or even more mythical ,like a werewolf that super longing! as always no disapointment to read your work my good Sir!! thank you for reding mine!!!
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the great comments, Martin. I appreciate them!
Susie Clevenger said
Powerful yearning here….the animal desperation for a love that is out of reach..
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, Susie! I appreciate the read and comment!
RoughWaterJohn said
I agree with Rinkly, I feel animals have passion, for life if not for love. On the human side, I’m passionate about this poem, beautiful! 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the awesome comment, John! I appreciate it a bunch!
Adam said
What a wonderful continuation of the story. In part one I sensed that the longing was more urgent, more feral. Part two makes me feel that this is possibly a long term pursuit that may never be realised.
A great read and I’m looking forward to part three 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Very perceptive of you to catch the lag in the intensity, Adam. Part three, In Dreams, is even less intense–more on the romantic side–and I think the last one, The Battle, will surprise you, but only in a way. Glad you’re enjoying the series! I appreciate the thought-filled comments!
SiNA said
wow! this is absolutely full of passion…the pleasure and pain bit does the trick for me 😀
charlesmashburn said
Thank you SiNA! I appreciate the “wow”. Always good to get them!
Catie Eliza said
I think this poem is wonderful and crafted beautifully. IT CAPTURES THE VULNERABILITY OF BEING IN LOVE AS WELL AS THE EXCITEMENT, oops… sorry didn’t mean to shout. :] Love is such a complex thing…http://catieeliza.wordpress.com/2010/12/29/what-is-love/ :]
Bless you, God uses you to bless others. :] xx
charlesmashburn said
Thank you Catie! You can shout if you want to–if it’s good stuff!
Always a pleasure to have you visit and comment!
Catie Eliza said
Well I love stopping by. And having a ponder on stuff. :] xx
charlesmashburn said
Oh man! I love it when you ponder stuff!
anjum wasim dar said
love has its own identity scents, visions mists and then sometimes disappointments enter too.A lovely poem of true feelings flowing well in pace and rhythm.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks very much for the wonderful comments!
Pamanner said
First, I love marbles :-). Second, you’ve created a dark, sensual, tension filled poem! Full of suspense!
charlesmashburn said
Okay! I think your my first marble lover!
Thanks for the great comments!
The Noiseless Cuckooclock said
love the textures, it indeed sounds like a wolf’s perspective in human form.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks for the great comments! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
Bodhirose said
Sounds like a passionate wolf–not going to give up until he finds his mate. I’m sure he will too!
I really enjoyed this!
Gayle
charlesmashburn said
I’m so glad you enjoyed it, Gayle. I appreciate the wonderful comments!
Sarah Johnston said
Another fine poem and amazing chapter. This is such a pleasure to come here and read your blog. Happy picnic I do enjoy your blog so much and so glad that you share on different picnic so I can read all your wonderful works.
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/03/memories-and-photographs-of-you/
charlesmashburn said
Thank you very much! I appreciate the awesome comments!
becca givens said
The urgent pursuit of longing in the first … the bond and vow to continue in the pursuit, no matter the lengh of time in the second part … I look forward the next “chapter” … Mesmerizing and captivating! Thank you for sharing! 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, Becca, for the awesome comments on the second chapter!
j said
i loved it…how the story moved and went along depicting pursuit…and it’s tragic end of frustration yet having some form of hope.
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, j! I appreciate the visit anc comments!
June_Butterfly said
Powerful Write!!Felt I was following the scent myself.So glad to ahve found this blog.Thanks for dropping by on mine,too.Btw,posted another piece.If you have time pls .do drop by,again.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the great comments!
I’m glad you’re enjoying the poem series AND the blog!
I will go back and check out your second entry.
terri0729 said
Oh Charlie, It gave me the shivers. It sounds like a werewolf almost, lol. I really liked it! Can’t wait for the next installment. Peace and love, Terri
charlesmashburn said
Terri… it IS a werewolf!
Thanks for the comments! I’m glad you’re enjoying the series!
terri0729 said
LOL! Good, I thought it was supposed to be just a wolf, glad to know my mind isn’t out of whack! Too funny. Peace and love…
Jamie said
Werewolves have always scared me since I first came across them as a child – in writing, of course – particularly Anthony Boucher’s Compleat Werewolf, a collection of short stories.
Your poem reads very well, and does not fall into any cliched traps which might make one think of the numerous books, TV series and films depicting these supernatural beasts. I even went back and read Part 1.
Look forward to more!
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the thought-filled comments, Jamie! I especially appreciate your not seeing any cliches. I try not to use them, and in most of my werewolf writings, I portray a different–more human/normal–person side of the character.
lolamouse said
“mixture of pine, earth, and heat…” so descriptive! I can almost smell this myself. Excellent poem. The urgency and rawness is palpable.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the wonderful comments, Lola!
veronicadimarco said
Oh my… an alpha male seeking her mate…:) exquisite writing! 😀
Thank you for your comment on mine..
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the comment!
And, youre very welcome!
Lu Ann said
Wooow, a great ending, it tears away all doubts. Thanks for shaing 😉
charlesmashburn said
Alright! I love them “Wooows”! Thanks Lu Ann. Stay tuned for part three! (Sunday 10/9 at 8:15pm)
Inside the Mind of Isadora said
I love the line ” To the moon I sing my sorrow” … it would be the perfect way to let sorrow go. I must read part 3 & 4.
Beautiful, Charles,
Isadora
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for the wonderful comments, Isadora! Part three this Sunday evening!
manicddaily said
I sense that you are on Team Jacob! A lot of fun.
charlesmashburn said
I don’t know what Team Jacob is. ??
Classic NYer said
You’re better off not knowing.
charlesmashburn said
If you come back and read the remaining two chapters, you may find yourself to be quite perceptive.
Thanks for the comments!
eclipseofthemoon said
“To the moon I sing my sorrow…” Souds familliar to me 🙂
Beutifully expressed emotions, powerful and daring poem, I’ll surely be back to read more
charlesmashburn said
Thank you for reading these first two in the series, Lenore. Your comments are very much appreciated, and I hope you’ll come back and read the remaining two in the series. #3, In Dreams, will be posted this Sunday at 8:15 PM; #4, The Battle, will be posted 10/16 at 8:15 PM.
meethimirchi said
amazing this one was 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Thank you! I appreciate the comment!
Classic NYer said
Damn! Sexy…
charlesmashburn said
Alrighty then! Thanks for the comment!
kshawnedgar said
Lonely chase 🙂
charlesmashburn said
Yep. Mighty lonely.
Thanks for the visit!
Seabell said
A strong message, still beautifully delivered…
charlesmashburn said
Thank you!
Ankoku Hikaru said
Nicely Written. I indeed enjoyed this piece.
charlesmashburn said
Thank you very much! I appreciate the visit and comment!
Anna Montgomery said
My encomia: Your two poems reveal the dance of the inner paramour, longing for that which is painfully close but always out of reach. They put me in mind of Rumi’s odes to the beloved.
charlesmashburn said
Exactly! You saw right through me, Anna!
Thanks for the encomia!
johnewordslinger said
Awesome, love the imagery here, brilliant, thank you so much,,, WS
charlesmashburn said
Thanks, again! Your comments are awesome!
Sharp Little Pencil said
Charles, I’m late commenting, but this is sustaining the tension very well. I can feel his frustration, the animal-in-human-in-animal give and take. Hauntingly beautiful – but what happens when they fiinally meet? What form will the wolf be? Sure will keep me coming back! Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/10/12/boulevard-noir-sunday-whirl/
charlesmashburn said
We will know next Sunday evening!
Thanks for the visit and comments!
elizena said
Beautifully haunting and full of passion. The wolf on a hilltop with the moon behind him searching for his mate. I loved it! Blessings.
charlesmashburn said
I’m glad you like it, Elizena!
Thank you for the wonderful comment!
lscotthoughts said
A very vivid yearning in your words; a wonderful continuation!
Lauren
charlesmashburn said
Thank you, Lauren!